So, one of the big issues I've been having lately is deciding how I want to start chapter 1 of my new book. The prologue is in the bag, but the intro to chapter 1 is giving me head aches. Here is a small sample of two I've started. Feel free to give any input on which you prefer.
Choice 1:
Being an innkeeper’s son was about as exciting as sweeping a floor.
Of course, that’s exactly what Darren Midlan was doing when his portly friend, Logan, walked through the ragged old doors of his father’s inn.
"Cayfor Wheldon is dead!" Logan Pronounced.
"Who is that?"
Choice 2: Amber light wafted from the cellar hatch, drifting on the wind as if it were smoke. Darren knew this wasn't right. Light did not waft. It beamed, it shot, it certainly did not drift about like a mist caught in a breeze. And yet, before his eyes, the amber light writhed in the crisp night air. He wanted to move forward, wanted to tough it, to discover its mystery, but he was also gripped by fear. Fear of the unknown. Fear of something that should not be, dancing just in front of him.
I was going to offer you 3 options, but right before posting the third I decided it was complete crap. So here you go. Choose wisely, lest you ruin my story.
Aloha
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Who is reading this stuff that is supposed to choose? eh? i know its not me... that's your responsibility.
ReplyDeleteDidn't you already decide on choice no.1?
cause I read a lot more about that one. I like choice 2 though... but that is just style preference. I like description and thought more than interaction. Its why I don't really read a lot!